12 August 2012

Flash Fiction– Throw in the Towel?

by Leigh Lundin
Leigh
As I mentioned before, John Floyd and R.T. Lawton not only routinely cram mysteries into less than 700 words, but John is a master of flash fiction, which I attempted a few months ago in A Night Out.

Brace yourself; I'm taking another stab at it. In thinking about the wisdom of writing another flash fiction, I was tempted to title it Throwing in the Towel, but I'll let you decide if I picked a better title.



WhiteWash
by Leigh Lundin

Bubbles was a slippery one. She tried to soft-soap me, but I strangled her in the bathtub, no trace, no prints, no evidence.

Me, I hate wet work, but the cops, they said it was a clean kill.

22 comments:

Bill G said...

Got a charge out of your arresting groaners. Your first one plays on the imagination.

Leigh Lundin said...

Bill, this piece is less cut and dried.

Fran Rizer said...

Leigh, I settled in to read your blog today--all prepared with a fresh cup of coffee, planning to sip it in leisure while reading. Needless to say, my plans are all washed up as I finished reading your column before my lips touched the cup!

Bill Crider said...

Loved it.

Janice said...

Clever.

Leigh Lundin said...

Thank you, Bill and Janice. I appreciate the support.

Fran, sorry about that. I was tempted to write about more about the criminal madness in Florida, but today I needed a break. Next week maybe…

Oh, how did your CTS repair go?

John Floyd said...

Good work, Leigh!

I'm reminded of the logline for Jaws 2: Just when you thought it was safe to go back in the water . . .

Terrie Farley Moran said...

Hysterical!

David Dean said...

Leigh, I think your latest shows a lot of promise, but needs some editing...tends to run on a bit.

I really enjoyed it, Leigh! Write more...or should I say less?

R.T. Lawton said...

Leigh, great one. Got my morning chuckle out of it.

Leigh Lundin said...

(laughing) David, in the future I'll do my best to be brief.

Thank you Terrie. I appreciate it.

John and RT, you are the masters of short-short fiction, but I try to learn from the sages.

Eve Fisher said...

LOL! And so clean!

Dixon Hill said...

Well, Leigh, you may think it's time to throw in the towel on writing flash fiction, but I say, "Don't throw the baby out with the bath water!"

--Dix

Leigh Lundin said...

(laughing) Leave it to Eve and Dixon to top my own puns.

Louis A. Willis said...
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Louis A. Willis said...

Three words are better than four, and “clean” carries more irony in the story than “towel” could. But, hey, keep the towel cause I like the story and expect more.

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Deborah Elliott-Upton said...

You made me laugh out loud, so that means you did well!

Jan Grape said...

It's too long. The real test is the 6 word story. AS IN:
Bubbles towel strangled. Evidence drained. wet-work complete.
Oh okay, that's 7 words...NEVER MIND.

J Carew said...

Seriously funny! Congratulations!

Jeff Baker said...

Groaner. Yeah! That's the word! :) :) :)

Anonymous said...

Leigh, great one!! Reminded me of a jacuzzi, in Jasper.

Leigh Lundin said...

Louis and Jan, that's right. These little stories are devilish to come up with.

Jeff, I know that's true. (laughing)

Deborah and J Carew, I'm glad that entertained.

Anon, jacuzzi in Jasper… too funny!